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Thaddeus, your narrative just FLOWS! I also notice, and appreciate your use of dialogue. I have trouble balancing between telling and showing, but you don't seem to. A line of dialogue such as, "The mind can only handle a blocker for so long. Already, you can experience side effects, a rush of fractured memories and dreams. Don’t worry. It’s all completely normal.” keep the reader tuned into the character despite all that's going on. Really good!!

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