This is a thoughtful deconstruction of a work in progress. Kudos to Pablo Baez for exposing himself in this way and to Thaddeus for his care in dissecting the work. I enjoyed the story for the first half. The tone, structure, and style match the club's frenetic atmosphere and bring the whole to life without describing laborious details. …
This is a thoughtful deconstruction of a work in progress. Kudos to Pablo Baez for exposing himself in this way and to Thaddeus for his care in dissecting the work. I enjoyed the story for the first half. The tone, structure, and style match the club's frenetic atmosphere and bring the whole to life without describing laborious details. I also got lost in the second half as the pace sped up and more characters were introduced. Still, I also marvelled at the vision to twist and bend the form - the whole ended up feeling like I was watching three choreographed dances happening simultaneously... which I think was the intent. I hope Pablo can take your notes on board and grace us with another version. I will read it for sure.
This is a thoughtful deconstruction of a work in progress. Kudos to Pablo Baez for exposing himself in this way and to Thaddeus for his care in dissecting the work. I enjoyed the story for the first half. The tone, structure, and style match the club's frenetic atmosphere and bring the whole to life without describing laborious details. I also got lost in the second half as the pace sped up and more characters were introduced. Still, I also marvelled at the vision to twist and bend the form - the whole ended up feeling like I was watching three choreographed dances happening simultaneously... which I think was the intent. I hope Pablo can take your notes on board and grace us with another version. I will read it for sure.