I give you all my thanks. For hours after posting this, I beat myself for "trying to hard," thinking I should have kept to those simple declarative sentences and a standard structure. (It wouldn't have mattered if I had. It's far too easy to doubt any choice we make.) Thank you again.
Well done! I like your style. Thank you for providing some relief from the simple declarative sentences that seems to prevail in most fiction here.
I give you all my thanks. For hours after posting this, I beat myself for "trying to hard," thinking I should have kept to those simple declarative sentences and a standard structure. (It wouldn't have mattered if I had. It's far too easy to doubt any choice we make.) Thank you again.
Stick to your guns..stylistic experimentation is of the essence ..please see link below..drives the SDS (Simple, Delcarative Sentence) crowd nuts...
https://open.substack.com/pub/slobovitch/p/incelarity?r=19q927&utm_campaign=post&utm_medium=web&showWelcomeOnShare=true